Comments on Introduction:
Nice introduction.  You clearly state what you are trying to do. 

Comments on previous work section:
Again, nice job finding appropriate references.  You might consider talking in more detail about how your research on prior work relates to your survey.  Did you read anything that might support or contradict specific findings from your survey?  Did your reading impact the questions you designed?  Why?

(The last sentence of this section seems like something's been deleted by accident.)

Comments on methods section
Mostly pretty clear.  You might consider reformatting the example survey questions to make them a bit easier to follow, but that's a minor point.
It will be interesting to see what sort of response rates you get.  

Comments on discussion
I like that you mentioned that the crowdedness question was often skipped.  Once you have your complete results, you may be able to explore this question (and others like it) in more detail.
Once you have your results, don't forget to talk about the overall message from your research, any improvements or future work that would help answer any remaining questions, etc.

General Comments:
In general, this is a good first draft.  I understand what questions you want to answer and what you are doing to answer them.  

Make sure you proofread the paper - there are a few places where you have incomplete sentences or missing words.

In scientific papers it is customary to include a 'References' section before the appendices that lists all the papers you cite.

Comments from BJ:

•	Please be sure to convert your references to APA style in the text (rather than footnoted MLA style) and include a list of references in APA format at the end of the paper.
•	I agree that this is a nice first draft, and paying attention to Bronwyn’s comments above will help in the final draft of your paper.