PAPER MAX EARNED Content 30 27 correct appropriate complete - the content with respect to Jack's study and your analysis of it is excellent - one missing ingredient is a list of literature references. E.g. one or two on Jack's work, and then a handful of references keyed to the specific analyses you do, so that an interested reader (one of Jack's data analysts for example) could go learn more about the techniques you are using. Organization 20 20 overall sentences and paragraphs signposts for skim reader two audiences (investigator and instructors) - a brief abstract summarizing findings would be useful - overall organization (at level of sects and subsects) great; section and subsection headers tend to describe problems of interest to Jack rather than stat techniques (that is good) - local organization (sentences and paragraphs) great Format 10 10 layout typography - great Language 10 10 voice precise clear concise forthright familiar fluid - excellent Mechanics 10 9 grammar usage punctuation spelling - light copyediting for spelling and other minor typos (ispell at least!) - leading double quotes need to be "turned around" (standard LaTeX newbie error) Figures and Tables 10 9 judiciousness each discussed in text - very nicely done - careful to label figures as figures and tables as tables (e.g. figure 8 is really a table...) - not always referred to in text! Appendix/es 10 10 judiciousness organization crossref'd from text - good selection of material for main text - all other material in appx, some crossref'ing to appx (good) TOTAL 100 95 OVERALL COMMENTS: great job with (a) a totally changing project (from Ghana to Pgh!) and (b) a weaker experimental design. You were not only able to say "what the experiment died of", but also to make positive, productive suggestions for designing future studies. That is a good outcome.