PAPER                         MAX        EARNED

Content                        30        30
  correct
  appropriate
  complete

- very nice setup of general problem and your role in the intro

- info provided at right level of detail throughout

- might like to hear something (in appx?) about the method of fitting
  the models, R code (if it is interesting), any difficulties
  encountered, etc.

- in sect 4.2.3, I still do not believe that the usual LRT theory applies
  here.  This will require further thought if this work is to be turned
  into a publishable paper.

Organization                   20        28
  overall
  sentences and paragraphs
  signposts for skim reader
  two audiences (investigator
    and instructors)

- given that your intro section is long, could really use a short
  abstract summarizing your findings

- overall organization (at the level of sections and subsects) very
  good.  I might put the 'experiment' section before the 'data'
  section though (though your order works as well).  section headers
  could be a bit more informative about the scientifically interesting
  topic in each sect or subsect but were generally OK

- local organization (sentences and parags) also very good

Format                         10        10
  layout
  typography

- excellent

Language                       10        10
  voice 
  precise
  clear
  concise
  forthright
  familiar
  fluid

- very nice.  

Mechanics                      10        10 
  grammar
  usage
  punctuation
  spelling

- beginning quotes turned the wrong way (common LaTeX newbie error)

- I was very impressed with the writing in this final draft.  You
  really put it together well!

Figures and Tables             10         8
  judiciousness
  each discussed in text

- generally nicely done 

- all figs a bit small to read easily.  make 'em all bigger -
  communication is more important than page numbers here!

- not all figs/tables referred to in text

Appendix/es                    10        10
  judiciousness
  organization
  crossref'd from text

- excellent use of appendices to describe methods (appx A) and supply
  additional detail on data analyses (appx B).

TOTAL                         100        96

OVERALL COMMENTS:

I thought you did an excellent job.  Very thoughtful and thorough
about both the science and the statistics.  It was fun to watch you
both grapple with this project, and succeed at both the statistics 
and the science.

Quite a compliment that Marc thinks this work can be turned into a 
publishable paper!  I hope that you are able to do that with him.